So, I set a little task for the APSotW and have finally had a chance to review the submissions. Here's the brief again:
You work for Wal-Mart's agency as a planner. You client, at the CMOs behest, has asked you to consider whether Wal-Mart should build a standalone social network for the brand to help deepen the role Wal-Mart plays in the lives of the 2 out of 3 Americans who visit them every week. Your job is to write a point of view and recommendation on what action should be taken. In one page. It will be sent direct to the CMO who is traveling China looking at expansion opportunities.
There were three responses, thanks for taking part.
Let's start (in no particular order) with Zeljko's. Starts with a business problem to address (people doing online price comparison), and goes on to explain an idea that has some power to it - build a site that aggregates store information (most purchased items), shopper reviews, etc. Some nice thinking as well about spreading this data through the web via data visualization.
There's some good stuff here but the argument could have been sharper - sharper business problem, how the idea solves that problem. And could have been clearer signposting of the argument. There's a great phrase in here about the pulse of the American shopper that could have been the theme of the memo.
Second submission is from Jacob. The approach is not a million miles away from Zeljko's. Arguably it's stronger in defining how the platform might work and what benefits it might bring, but is weaker as it doesn't really define the business problem this might address or what it's role might be for the business.
Finally, we have an anonymous entry. There's some good stuff here about doing lots of small stuff, fitting into a seasonal calendar and into people's lives but it seems to be missing the bigger picture - what's the problem or opportunity, what's the strategic idea to take advantage or solve this, how it works and why it makes sense to invest in.
That last comment feels true to all the entries. All would have benefitted from some clearer signposting, some crisper, more memorable language and even some attempt at making a case for why investment makes sense - how much might it cost and what might the business expect to get back from it and why this makes more sense than other alternative investments. (I know we haven't got data but we could make some assumptions). Anyway, thanks all for contributing and hope this feedback was of some use. I know it was a dry challenge, but I think it's an important one.
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